Integrating the Fifth Source

If you would like to paraphrase and cite the fifth source, instead of directly quoting it, you may.

Grading Grid Assignment Three

Attach written suggestions from your peers to your final drafts for full peer review credit. Italicize sentences that are significantly changed from the draft (by making the sentences look like this).
1. Thesis: argument fully corresponds to the assignment student is revising (20%)
1 5 6 7 8 9 10

2. Structure: Essay organized around topic sentences; each paragraph provides 'they say' context; paragraph frames material; full introduction and conclusion are present (20%)
1 5 6 7 8 9 10

3. Evidence: Essay successfully places direct quotes into each body paragraph; essay cites those quotes correctly according to MLA guidelines; essay contains a bibliography; essay includes three outside sources;  integration of outside research into paragraphs (framing, citation, paraphrase); presence of three sources  (30%)
1 5 6 7 8 9 10

4. Critical Thinking: Essay interprets quotes in original ways that go beyond class discussion; essay connects main ideas to other texts or moments in text; essay utilizes keywords and defines them (20%)
1 5 6 7 8 9 10

5. Polish: Essay demonstrates signs of revision; essay italicizes new material; essay follows assignment instructions; grammatical errors do not detract from meaning (10%)
1 5 6 7 8 9 10

Final Blog due May 31

For your final blog of the semeter, offer your concluding perspective on the subject of this class: the industrial food system. Explain to your readers what you think is the most important information they need to know about this system, explain how your perspective on the system evolved (or didn't) over the course of the semester, and explain how the subject matter has or has not challenged your own personal perspectives on eating in America.

Class on Thursday May 31 includes conferences

We have only two classes left. Please take the time over the next week to revise your third essay so that we can talk about it on Thursday. I will hold these conferences in the first hour of class. The first hour of class is very important to attend as well, as we will be holding a final exam review.

Blogging the Peer Review

Citing Web Sources

Web sources need to be framed, cited, summarized, and paraphrased, too. See our class discussion today, and don't forget to use the LaGuardia Library Website.

Revised Prose: Final Drafts

Please italicize, or make the sentences look like this, when you have changed more than 30% of the sentence (just count the new words versus the old words. If you changed more than 30% of the sentence, put it in italics. I want to be able to quickly see what material you added to these essays, and what is new from previous drafts. The italics button is between the "B" and "u" button at the top of word processing screen on the toolbox line.

Attaching previous drafts

When you turn in the final draft for this essay, please turn in your peer review notes from class on Thursday May 24, and also please turn in ONE COPY of the the draft you brought in for that peer review.

If you didn't bring an essay to the peer review, please go to the Writing Center, and also be sure to turn in a copy of the draft as well.

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Blog Five: Due by Sunday

Summarize (and/or frame)  the main points of the film The Eleventh Hour. Paraphrase a quote from one speaker in the film, and connect the speaker's idea to an issue we have been discussing during the semester. Remember you're writing for an outside audience.

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Twitter Time III #foodethics

1. Google "rBGH" milk. Find a news article linked to it. Tweet it.
2. Tweet a "summary" of the article in one Tweet.
3. "React" to the article in one Tweet.

4. Google "peak fish." Find a news article linked to it. Tweet it.
5. Tweet a "summary" of the article in one Tweet.
6. "React" to the article in one Tweet.

Assignment Three Update

Please check the Assignment Three instructions. A new option has been provided for students choosing what they want to write about.

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Twitter Time II

1. Log into Twitter and scan the Tweets from your classmates. "ReTweet" a Tweet you find interesting.

2. Go into the LaGuardia Library search engine and find a newspaper article or journal essay you could use for your third assignment. Tweet the basic info about what you found (author, title), then Tweet how you think you'll use it in your essay.

Grading Grid: Assignment Two Peer Review

Peer Review Guidelines

1. Move into your PR groups.
2. Determine who will read in what order.
3. Budget 10-15 minutes per person and no more.
4. The reader reads their paper aloud.
5. Give written feedback that offers specific criticism according to criteria below.
6. Put your name on this feedback and give it to the writer.
7. Keep your written feedback and staple it to your final draft.
 


ENG 101 Assignment Two

Evaluate the essays in your peer review groups by responding thoughtfully to each of the following criteria. Focus on the criteria you feel students should most address in their drafts.  

Attach written suggestions from your peers to your final drafts for full peer review credit.

1. Thesis: argument that explains the industrial food system from a psychological perspective.  The argument should address at least three different positions in the industrial food system (animal, worker, manager are required) in order to explain how this system functions on a day-to-day basis.

2. Structure: Essay organized around topic sentences; each paragraph provides 'they say' context; essay explains direct quotations (20%)

3. Evidence: Essay successfully places direct quotes into each body paragraph; essay cites those quotes correctly according to MLA guidelines; essay contains a bibliography (20%)

3a. Evidence: integration of outside research into paragraphs (framing, citation, paraphrase); presence of three sources (10%)

4. Critical Thinking: Essay interprets quotes in original ways that go beyond class discussion; essay connects main ideas to other texts or moments in text; essay utilizes keywords and defines them

Paragraph

In Gail Eisnitz’s Slaughterhouse she discusses that some of the reasons animals are killed inhumanely stem from myths about how killing methods affect the presence of bacteria in the meat. When Eisnitz talks to Bucky White, a worker at the Morrell plant in Sioux City, Iowa, he says that a superintendent turns the stun gun down that workers use to knock cows unconscious. This happens because the company doesn’t want the cows “too dead” (122). The company believes that if the animals don’t bleed out – while they’re still alive – that they will retain their blood. This blood will breed bacteria and make the meat sick. Even though this method has been disputed by numerous scientific studies that Eisnitz cites, the policy continues. This is important to reflect on. Eisnitz doesn’t offer an explanation. When we consider the reasons the policy continues, we could reflect on whether or not the company position reflects ignorance or manipulation. On the one hand, the company could do this because the executives lack a scientific background. They believe in their own position out of arrogance and because they fear the knowledge of those less powerful than themselves. On the other hand, they could have this position because they’re manipulating workers and critics. In reality, they use the idea of the myth to hide their real economic motive.

Twitter Time

1. Sign up for a class Twitter account if you haven't already. (See directions at right).

2. Post the Twitter ID to your blog.

3. For new Tweets, use the #hashtag #foodethics

4. For Monday's class, Tweet the following:

a. paraphrase of a passage you'd like to discuss in class (with page number) (in under 160 characters)
b. go to the course blog and by find classmates Twitter IDs on their blogs. Begin to follow them.
c. In Google, google the search terms "food addiction cocaine" and "tweet" a link to a news article. To do this, simply click on a Twitter icon (bird, T, etc) on the news article and it will repost to your Twitter feed. You must be signed in to do this.

May Check

1. What did you do to prepare for the midterm? Did you take notes? Did you use the notes? Did you review course materials and/or notes from class?

2. How did you do on the "Super-quiz" last Thursday? (You can take it out and look at it.) Do you understand the issues you had, if any? What are some ways you can improve any areas?

3. How confident are you that your second essay will improve any areas that need improvement? What steps are you taking to improve the second essay?

Blog Four

Use the fourth blog as a space for reflection on the article "The End of Overeating" by Dr. David Kessler. What does this new knowledge contribute to our discussion of CAFOs?

This blog can be due Friday by 11 since I was late posting this.

Enjoy the weekend

We'll deal with the reading on Monday, as a class.

Enjoy the weekend.

Ethics of Food Blog Comment Assignment

This assignment asks you to offer a peer some advice on their writing. Below you fill find a link to an assignment. You will also find your name linked to the blog of another student. You will also find some instructions for leaving written feedback that echoes what we went over in class.

Directions (from the text Tutoring Writing)

1. Open a general statement of assessment about the blog's relationship to the assignment. Be clear about which parts fulfill the assignment and which parts need improvement.
2. Present comments so the writer knows which problems with text are most important and which are of lesser importance.
3. Use comments primarily to call attention to strengths and weaknesses in the piece, and be clear about the precise points where they occur.
4. Don't feel obligated to do all the 'fixing.' Refrain from focusing on grammar unless it impedes your ability to understand the piece.
5. Write comments that are text-specific, and uniquely aimed at the blog and the writer.

Strategies

1. Pose at least two questions that ask for clarification or that seek other possible views or more information on the subject.
2. Let the writer know what specific lines, ideas, and stylistic touches you find pleasing.
3. When you make a specific, concrete suggestion for improvement, try couching it in a qualifier: "You might try..." or "Why don't you add..." or "Another way of writing the lead might be..."
4. If you notice a pattern of errors (incorrect use of commas, etc) comment on it in a global way at the end of the piece.


The link to the assignment is HERE.

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Blog Assignment Two: From Farm to Fridge

Directions

First, students should watch the following four-minute video (here).

For their blog, students should summarize the contents of the video in terms of facts and images. The blog should address what the video said, but also what it showed. Consider creating keywords. 

After viewing the video and summarizing it, students should analyze the contents of the video by connecting it with the reading and meditating on its significance. 

Topic Sentence Exercise

They took turns minding each other’s piglets so that each sow could forage. All of this natural behavior is inexpressible in confinement. 

Domestics pigs, usually raised in confinement, were let loose in this facility and their behavior observed. 

In this environment, the sows covered almost a mile a day in foraging, and, in keeping with their reputation as clean animals, they built carefully constructed nests on a hillside so that urine and feces ran downhill. 

Under normal conditions, pigs reveal that they are highly intelligent and behaviorally complex animals.

Researchers at the University of Edinburgh created a ‘pig park’ that approximates the habits of wild swine.

Blogging the peer review

For Introductions

Besides making sure your thesis is there:

- test whether or not your keywords are defined
EX: Superbugs are...
- introduce the texts you're going to be using
EX: In this essay I will give evidence from The CAFO Reader, Food, INC., and Slaughterhouse.
- give the reader a story/preview from your evidence
EX: We can already see these ideas at work in a story from The CAFO Reader. In that story...

Topic Sentences

Topic sentences of paragraphs should generally correspond to the ideas raised in the thesis. Further, the topic sentence of each paragraph should define what every other sentence in that paragraph is about.

Keywords

Remember, keywords are ideas. They are ideas because they can explain more than one thing. Is antibiotics a keyword? Maybe...but "low-wages" are definitely a keyword, because they can explain how labor is paid for in more than one industry (food, retail, prison, etc).

NOTE: You don't have to actually use the word "keyword" in your essays. You might use the word "ideas" instead - it depends on who you consider your reader to be.

Peer Review: Assignment One

Peer Review Guidelines

1. Move into your PR groups.
2. Determine who will read in what order.
3. Budget 10-15 minutes per person and no more.
4. The reader reads their paper aloud.
5. Give written feedback that offers specific criticism according to criteria below.
6. Put your name on this feedback and give it to the writer.
7. Keep your written feedback and staple it to your final draft.
 


ENG 101 Assignment One

Evaluate the essays in your peer review groups by responding thoughtfully to each of the following criteria. Focus on the criteria you feel students should most address in their drafts. Attach written suggestions from your peers to your final drafts for full peer review credit.

1. Thesis: Essay explains what CAFOs do, how CAFOs work, and what they mean using keywords; (30%)

2. Structure: Essay organized around topic sentences; each paragraph provides 'they say' context; essay explains direct quotations (30%)

3. Evidence: Essay successfully places direct quotes into each body paragraph; essay cites those quotes correctly according to MLA guidelines; essay contains a bibliography (20%)

4. Critical Thinking: Essay interprets quotes in original ways that go beyond class discussion; essay connects main ideas to other texts or moments in text; essay utilizes keywords and defines them

Quiz: CAFO Reader

Open note if you show the professor your note-taking process. 

Directions: Summarize the main ideas of the CAFO Reader assignment. More points will be awarded for more specific answers. Worth up to 6 points. 

Blog One: Summary, Paraphrase, and Direct Quotation

Length: 250-300 words

For your first blog, summarize the introduction of Daniel Imhoff's The CAFO Reader. Be sure to practice the following techniques:

* Give your reader directions. Who is your audience? What do they need to know when they encounter your blog post for the first time?

Sample directions: In this blog I will discuss...

* Practice summary: summary is the art of condensing lots of information into just several sentences. You may have to raise key terms, key dates, keywords, or key ideas. You will have to arrange these ideas in a way that makes sense for your reader. You should define the special terms, keywords, or ideas that you bring up. If the reader needs to know more about the passage where you found the idea, it's your job to explain it.

* Practice paraphrase: Paraphrasing happens when you put a short phrase or sentence or important idea into your own words. Remember to refer to the author.

* Direct quotation: Once in your blog, use "direct quotation" to pull out a special phrase, group of words, single word, or sentence that you find especially meaningful. Be sure to put citation at the end of your sentence, before the period. Then explain the meaning of that quotation to your reader, no matter what else happens in your blog.

This quote is important because...

OR


Here, Imhoff's ideas are important because....

Diagnostic Instructions

Writing Directions

Read the passage handed out in class and write a 400-word essay responding to the ideas it presents.  In your introduction, be sure to state the article’s most important ideas. Develop your introduction by identifying the one idea in the passage that you feel is especially significant, and explain its significance - this will be your thesis.  Support this thesis with evidence or examples drawn from the article, other texts you have read and/or learned in school, and/or personally experienced. As you write your essay, be sure to summarize the important passages in your own words, quoting where you feel necessary or desirable to make a point. 

Remember to review your essay and make any changes or corrections that are needed to help your reader follow your thinking.  You will have 60 minutes to complete your essay.

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